上海中考英语作文和点评

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2014上海中考英语作文范文和点评

  篇一:2014上海中考英语作文范文和点评

  中考作文点评

2014上海中考英语作文范文和点评

  今年的中考英语作文题是“明年此时”(This Time Next Year ),黄浦区初中英语教研员周加有分析,这道题比较抽象,给予了考生一定的想象空间,可以说是在“意料之外,又在情理之中”。周加有表示,前几年的作文题比较多的是从学生的角度对某些事物谈感受,或者对一些事情进行评论,比较容易套题。但今年的这道题不是很具体,加上时态是将来式,因此对学生来说不太容易套题,要写好必须有自己的想法,所以有一定难度。不过,今年的这道作文题依然延续前几年的特点——以“我”为出发点,谈的还是学生自己,这点方便了学生有话可说、有情可抒。  2014年中考英语作文:

  题目:This time next year

  This time next year I will be enjoying my senior school life 1.which I have  expected for a long time. The life then will be 2.as colorful as flowers.I will take an active part in all kinds of activities in high school 3.because the saying goes ”All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy”. In addition, making friends 4.will be on top of the list since a real friendship5.is of great importance to me. As for me, I will be definitely6.turning a new leaf of my  future life this time next year, and I’m really looking forward to it.  精彩亮点分析:

  亮点一:定语从句修饰对高中生活的向往

  亮点二:用as...as的比较级结构,抓人眼球

  亮点三: 用到了idiom,而且用的极为恰当

  亮点四: on top of the list永远放在第一位

  亮点五:be of great importance 名词结构更高端

  亮点六: turn a new leaf of my future life 翻开未来生活的新篇章

  写作小Tip:

  今年中考是篇看似记叙却要叙中带议的文章。全文的时态应全部运用一般将来时,对未来生活进行展望。全文应表达积极阳光的信念。

  2014年上海中考英语范文1 This Time Next Year

  It's exciting to imagine what the happy life will be like.

  At this time next year, I will be a senior high student, and I will make a lot of new friends. I hope to be more independent so that perhaps I will be taking part in a summer camp abroad to improve my spoken English. Also I will help my parents do housework in order to know how to take care of myself when I am alone.

  Life will be totally different, but I'm really looking forward to it.

  【解析】

  这篇作文需要涉及三个方面:变化、期望和自己的作为,因此文章中需要涵盖着三点。

  第二段的第一句是明年此时的变化,第二句是期望及第一个作为,紧接其后的是第二个作为,而最后表达出了作者对变化的想法及态度。

  2014年上海中考英语范文2

  This Time Next Year

  Life is changeable, and that's why everyone longs for the future, which is full of challenge as well as hope.

  Perhaps I will have achieved my goal this time next year, studying in a senior high school. Despite that, diligence will be still needed to make myself go further in English. Basically, it is important to concentrate in class and take notes carefully. Then, I will benefit from reading

  English books. What is more, going abroad is of great use in improving my oral English. Only in this way can I progress in English endlessly.

  Make plans and go for what I want. And I believe when the challenge is coming, the hope is also around the corner.

  (110 words)

  文章的标题告诉我们文章内容应该是与未来的生活相关的,生活在变化,一年后我将进入高中,但是学习还在继续,所以我仍有自己的目标。文章主要立足于两点,我对未来的计划或者期待,以及我要如何去实现。作为一名英语学习者,我会从三点去提高自己的英语。英语学习是一个持续的过程,只有不断努力才会有收获

  篇二:上海中考英语作文指导范文

  作文目录

  1. A good way to study English  学习英语的方法

  2. A good way to study well  努力学习的方法

  3. Travelling (7篇) 旅行

  4. Haze weather in Shanghai(3篇)  上海的雾霾天气

  5. My view on comic strips漫画之我见

  6. My way to school (2篇)上学路上

  7. My views on an English Festival  (2篇)  英语节之我见

  8. Using the Internet makes our life convenient 运用网络使生活更便利

  9. Let’s learn to smile学会微笑

  10. Growing up with good books (2篇) 好书伴我成长

  11. The best gift I’ve received(3篇)  我收到的最好的礼物

  12. Encouragement brings me power(5篇) 鼓励带给我能量

  13. Being a polite person 做一个有礼貌的人

  14. How to protect myself 2013上海中考满分作文

  15. Write a letter 写一封信

  16. This time next year明年此时

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  My way of studying English is to read lots of English books. It is very efficient.

  When I read English books, I can learn lots of extra-curricular words (which enable me to write better sentences as well as understand articles better.)Besides, it can set examples of writing articles for me. So I think reading books is a good way. It enables me to learn better with less time. However, there is no doubt that there are still some better ways. But no matter how we learn, the idea of using good methods never changes. A good method can always improve the quantity and quality of what we do, not only for studying English.

  A good way to study well

  In my opinion, reading widely is a good way to study well.

  On one hand, reading widely can bring us lots of powerful knowledge which we can’t learn in class as well as give us much fun. Reading is like stairs of a high mountain. The more you read, the higher you will go and the better you will learn. On the other hand, reading can also open your mind, which will help you easily solve the problems which are so difficult that few people can work out. How useful the way is!

  To sum up, if you read a book every day, you will study better and better.

  Nowadays, travelling is becoming a more and more important part of our life. As tourists, we ought to pay attention to our behaviors. First, respecting local customs is of great importance. We should learn some traditions of the place before we travel so that we won’t do things that make local people unhappy. Also, wearing a smile is a good way to show our politeness. Wherever we go and whatever we do, smile is a great passport that shows kindness and friendliness. When we are abroad or in other cities, we should always be friendly and kind to local people. In a nutshell, l hope you can follow my tips when you travel.

  Nowadays, travelling is becoming a more and more important part of our life. Many students plan to travel with their parents on holidays. But when we are travelling, we should pay attention to our behaviors and travel politely. Firstly, we should keep quiet when we’re travelling. Secondly, it will be terrible to draw some pictures on famous buildings.

  I think that if we do these things well, we’ll have a good time when we are travelling.

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  Nowadays, travelling is becoming a more and more important part of our life. As a tourist, we must pay attention to our behaviors.  First of all, we must obey the rules.  Next, we must keep the environment clean. For example, we should leave rubbish in rubbish bins. A clean environment can make us feel happy . we must respect local customs so that we can give them a good impression. More importantly, it will be very bad to hurt the ancient buildings because they are very precious and they should be protected . in a word, it is important for us to control ourselves when we are going for a trip.

  Nowadays, travelling is becoming a more and more important part of our life. Quite a few people go abroad to spend their holidays. We should pay attention to our behaviors. First, we should put rubbish into rubbish bins instead of  leaving it everywhere. Second, when we have a walk along the lakes, we shouldn’t throw stones into the lake. What’s more, we shouldn’t shout or smoke in public places. We should give others a helping hand when they are in trouble. Last but not least, it will be necessary not to draw here and there. I think if we do these,our travelling will be better.

  Nowadays, travelling is becoming a more and more important part of our life. While travelling, we should pay attention to our behaviors. It is as important as enjoying the views. First, when we travel to another country, we should respect local customs. If we don’t, we may be not popular among the people in that country. Second , it will be terrible to leave rubbish in the river or on the road. It may make the view less beautiful. Finally, we should be quiet in public p places. If we are noisy, we may make others unhappy. As a result, I think we should pay attention to our behaviors while travelling .

  Nowadays, travelling is becoming a more and more important part of our life. When we travel to other places, we should pay attention to our behaviors. Firstly, we must respect local customs. We shouldn’t draw or write on the wall. What’s more, it will be terrible to leave rubbish. Instead, we ought to put it into rubbish bins. Last but not least, we mustn’t take photos if it isn’t allowed.

  I hope that everyone can behave well during the trip. In this way, our life will be better.

  Nowadays, travelling is becoming a more and more important part of our life. As students, it is common that we go travelling with our parents when we are free.  But we must pay attention to our behaviors when we travel to other countries and local places.

  Firstly, we should respect the local culture. Every country has its own culture and it’s precious. So we can’t be rude to their culture. What’s more, when we ave arrive at a famous scenery spot, wee can take photos with it so that we can have a nice memory about it . but we can’t destroy any of it. Instead, we

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  篇三:上海初三中考英语作文范文

  2010上海初三中考英语作文范文(一)

  林宏的笔友莉莉今年夏天将来沪旅游。林宏去信表示欢迎,并准备去机场迎接。

  还告诉她上海有不少值得游玩的地方,他将陪同参观旅游。(用书信体写)

  June 7, 2010

  Dear Lily,

  I’m delighted to learn that you will be coming to Shanghai during the

  summer holidays. I will meet you at the airport and be your guide during

  your stay.

  I believe there’s a lot for you to see in Shanghai. Yu Garden and the Jade

  Buddhist Temple will show you traces of our ancient architecture and

  culture. The Bund — the glory of modern Shanghai, — has been an

  attraction throughout the 20th century. Modern constructions are also

  very popular with tourists. You will be impressed by the Grand Theatre,

  where world-famous musical concerts are often held. You really shouldn’

  t miss the symbol of Shanghai—the Oriental Pearl TV Tower. The bird’s

  eye view of the whole city from there is really wonderful.

  ExcitedI am sure you will have a good time in Shanghai.

  I can’t wait to see you!

  Yours,

  Lin Hon

  2011上海初三中考英语作文范文(二)

  国际青年艺术节(the International Youth Arts Festival)即将举行。作为

  一名志愿者,谈谈你的打算。

  The International Youth Festival will be held in Shanghai soon and I am

  honoured to be a volunteer.

  As a volunteer, it is my duty to do my best for the International Youth

  Festival. First, I’ll help to organize the festival. For example, I can send

  out leaflets and put up posters in the streets. I can offer my suggestions

  to the Festival Organization Committee. Second, I have a good command

  of foreign languages. I can speak English and Japanese. Therefore I am

  capable of being a guide and translator for the visitors. I’d like to answer

  their questions to help them solve problems so that they can have a

  good time during their stay in shanghai.

  Also, I can benefit from the work as it can eich my social experience

  and broaden my horizons.

  I hope the International Youth Arts Festival will be a great success and

  make a deep impression on the foreign visitors who attend.

  2011上海初三中考英语作文范文(三)

  How to make wise use of the computer

  With the rapid development /fast growth of modern science /new

  technology, the computer has played a more and more important role in

  our society. Meanwhile, how to make wise use of the computer is also

  very important.

  First, I will learn what is happening / have access to immediate

  international events through the internet to widen my knowledge. What’

  s more, I can depend on the computer to write my blog and down load

  pop music.

  With the help of the computer, I find my life interesting and fascinating.

  2011上海初三中考英语作文范文(四)

  有些学生喜欢报刊阅读,有些学生喜欢电脑了解新闻信息,我的选择。

  Nearly one-third of the students still prefer the traditional reading

  pattern---newspaper while the rest have turned to the computer.

  I take the newspaper. First, compared with the headline reading on the

  net, newspaper covers a wider range. What’s more, newspaper reading

  does less harm to eyes than on-line reading because the computer

  screen flashes from time to time. Finally, we can take the newspaper to

  read wherever there is no electricity or no web signal.

  So, I have developed the habit of reading newspaper to learn what is

  happening all over the world.

  2011上海初三中考英语作文范文(五)

  以假期去做一名志愿者服务为内容,字数不少于60字。

  As a Junior Three student, I think I should not only study hard, but also

  serve the society well if I am given a chance. The end of the junior school

  life will provide me with a good chance to work as a volunteer in the

  coming summer holiday.

  What I most want to do is to take care of the old living alone without

  relatives, I can read newspapers and interesting stories to them, help

  them wash the clothes, and cook for them. Besides, I will try my best to

  collect the rubbish in my neighbourhood to make the surroundings clean

  and beautiful. Finally, I can follow the adult volunteers to advise those

  who smoke in public not to smoke.

  I believe I will have interesting experience as a volunteer.

  2011上海初三中考英语作文范文(六)

  以“我最难忘的一课“为题,不少于60字

  Last summer I went to U.S.A to spend three weeks study with the local

  students, where I learned a lot of new things and I will never forget the

  Astrology class.

  That morning we went to the local space museum to have my first lesson

  abroad. During the class, we had a discussion on whether we should

  carry out the space project. With the advanced teaching materials and

  the experienced professor, we had a general idea of our space success

  and failure as well. I first realized how serious the population explosion

  and the pollution was. What’s more, I learned the earth was faced with

  more difficulties than ever before.

  This class was not only my first class abroad but also helped me learn

  how important space exploration was to us.

  2011上海初三中考英语作文范文(七)

  化名李明向李老师写一个请假条,因淋雨感冒发烧下周不能参加学校的春游。时

  间为4月6日

  April 6,2011

  Dear Mr. Li,  I’m very sorry that I can’t follow the class to go on a trip next week. I

  have to ask for a sick leave because I was caught in the heavy rain on my

  way back home yesterday. When I felt uncomfortable, my mother took

  me to the hospital. The doctor there took my temperature and told me I

  got a high fever. So the doctor asked me to have a good rest at home

  and have some medicine.

  I hope my classmates will have a good time while travelling. What a pity I

  can’t go with you.

  Yours truly,

  Li Ming

  2012上海初三中考英语作文范文

  篇四:上海初三英语作文样本

  一类:

  There is no denying that life is a mixture of laughters and tears. As far as I am concerned, the exam can cultivate your confidence and ability. To keep a positive attitude towards it, you’ll find it easy to overcome. Only by this way can you prove yourself. As a saying goes, ‘There is no royal road to learn’. I know this exam is of great importance to you. Don’t be so frustrated. To put what you have learnt into practice and devote your leisure time to studying little by little, you’ll be delighted to find others speaking highly of you. As a saying goes, ‘Life is like a box of chocolate, you never know what you are gonna to get.’ I wish you to pursue your extraordinary success. By the way, I believe that this exam is not only significant, but also magnificent!

  Every challenge has two results, failure or success. The result of the coming exam isn’t that important to you, for it’s just an inevitable answer to prove how hard you have worked this semester. If you do everything that you can do perfectly and excellently, there’s nothing to regret even if you get a failure in the end. Betty, please try to relax yourself when feeling so anxious and nervous that you can’t concentrate on the things you’re dealing with. Do whatever you love, such as listening to the music or going out for a jogging. Try your best to overcome obstacles and persevere in achieving you goal.

  I always believe you’re the best!

  二类:

  I am your friend Joe. There is a coming exam. Don’t upset about it for you cares too much about the result. You can go outside to have some sports to relax yourself. Don’t think this exam is difficult. Please take a deep breath to calm yourself down. In my opinion, all exams are easy enough for you to get good marks.  I firmly believe you are the best!don’t care too much about the result. Believe yourself, Betty!

  三类

  Betty, you needn’t upset about a coming exam for she cares too much about the result, if you work hard, you will became better, if you don’t hard-work, you will became worse, so you needn’t worry about, I give you some advice, you should more hard-work, you should don’t watch TV in weekends, you should go over. I think you become better.

  四类

  Don’t upset about a coming exam for you cares too much about the result. The exam is no diffcult, it is easy. WhyBecause you must study all, it is you knew, By the way, the exam is comed, you upset it, the exam is also. So you don’t upset about a coming exam for you cares too ,uch about the result. You should like me, don’t you

  篇五:上海中考英语作文范文背诵

  Writing Material (1)

  Trip / unforgettable experience / weekend /

  Last year, I was lucky enough to visit … with my ….. Before we went there, we had got a lot of information from the Internet. XXX  is a beautiful city and it is famous for XXX. Luckily, when we got there, the sun was shining and the wind was blowing gently. We visited some places in good mood. We climbed the hill and we were all attracted by the beautiful scenery on the top of the hill. We also taste a lot of local snacks. We had a wonderful time there. What an unforgettable experience it was!

  Change / difficulties / how to learn English

  As we all know, English is one of the most widely used language all over the world. It's important for us to study English well. I like English as well as maths and physics. But many times, the marks I got in English tests were not as good as those in my Math tests. I thought it over and over. At last, I decided to change my way of study. From then on, I have began to pay attention to listening. In my spare time, I also often read English magazines and newspapers In addition, I reviewed the English notes after class every day. By doing this, I made great progress in English and got a good mark in the final exam last term.

  Love / thank you, xxx

  There's some love around me, such as my parents', my teachers' and my classmates' and so on. I feel happy and warm whenever I get love from them. My mother looks after me better than anyone else. My teachers are always kind to me. They have done their best to let me know more. And most of my classmates are always ready to help me when I am in trouble. In return for this, I also prepare to help them at any time. I think if the world is full of love, it will become more beautiful.

  What can I do for our environment/ green consumer / protect the earth

  Everyone can do something for our environment. For me, I should try to save electricity in my daily life. For example, if I am the last person to leave the classroom, I will always remember to turn off the lights. Besides, in order to protect our forests, I will use paper wisely. I should try to use both sides of paper whenever it is possible. What's more, I will not use things like paper cups and disposable chopsticks because of they are made of wood. I believe that doing all these small things will improve our environment and help make our world a better place to live in

  和谐社会/ a lovely Shanghainese

  As middle school students inShanghai, what should we doFirstly, we should love our motherland, and we should love our hometowns and take an active part in our school activity. Secondly, let's

  fill the world with love. We should show our respect for old people, our parents and our teachers. We should also care for each other and help those who in need. More importantly, all of us must be honest in our daily life. What's more, let's work together to save energy and protect our natural environment, including animals, trees, flowers and grass.

  健康成长

  We all want to grow up happily and healthily, and for this goal we must do several things. Firstly, we should be brave in front of difficulties. Secondly, we must study hard because knowledge is power. If we have the power, we can help to build our country and enjoy life better. In order to study well, we need to do sports so that we can keep fit. We can go running, play ball games or simply take a walk after a day's study. If we do those things well, we will be able to grow up happily and healthily.

  Sports

  Sports and games are beneficial to us . First, sports and games are good for our health. They can make us strong, prevent us from getting too fat, and keep us healthy. What's more, they can make our life richer and more colourful.

  Jogging is now in fashion. Many people begin jogging because they believe it is very good exercises. It makes your stronger and helps you lose weight. It can also help you build up confidence in yourself.

  Sports help to keep people healthy, make people wise, train people's characters ,and,above all, help people to live happily.

  Playing table tennis is my favourite sport. I am so interested in it that I go to play it with my parents every weekend. I find playing table-tennis one of the effective ways to relax. It has not only build up my health but also my confidence in my study.

  Hobby

  Travelling has many advantages. By travelling, you can broaden your mind, learn about other people, including their cultures, customs, the life style and languages. You can not only visit famous places and learn about past, but also get some relaxation and peace by eating local food and seeing beautiful places, so I think travelling is the best way of pastime.

  Listening to music will make you feel relaxed. Whenever you feel sad, you can just turn on the radio and listen to some music. Music can relieve your stress. Music can cheer you up when you are sad.

  Learning English

  To learn English well, we must read more, speak more, listen more and write

  more.

  I took every chance to practise, such as going to the English corner, talking to foreigners, reading English aloud in the morning, and even speaking to myself from time to time. I kept practicing for a long time and my spoke English is much better than before.  I try to make it a rule to listen to the English programs on radio or TV.  On my way to school, I listen to some English tapes instead of music.

  I pick up my courage and take every chance to speak English with native speakers.

  School life

  My life in the middle school is busy but interesting. During my stay in the middle school, there are many activities, like speech contests, social gatherings and parties, which provide chances for me to make a lot of friends.

  篇六:上海市历届中考英语作文题目

  上海市历届中考英语作文题目

  2002  My favorite thing(s) 我的心爱之物

  2003  To be a lovely Shanghainese 做一个可爱的上海人

  2004Leave School  毕业时分

  2005  Growing pains and gains 成长的烦恼

  2006  I have a dream  我有一个梦

  2007  A Story about My Parent(s)”  一个关于我父/母的故事

  2008Love Around Me  爱在我身边

  2009I want to do something for my school  我想为我的学校做点什么

  2010I'm proud of myself 我为我自己感到自豪

  2011I’m a member of .... 我是……的一员

  2012If you are Joe.your friend Betty is upset because she cares too much about the result. 写给一个考试焦虑考生的一封信,并给予建议

  2013  How to protect myself 如何保护自己

  2014  This time next year  明年此时

  篇七:中考英语作文辅导材料及范文模板

  英语写作材料

  培养英语思维---词的搭配

  大雨heavy rain 大桥long bridge 大楼high rise/large building 大错big/terrible/serious mistake大病serious illness  大地震major earthquake 句子的表达-注意英汉差别

  一、状语

  e.g. 她一周有三个下午在一家百货公司做兼职。

  在我十岁那年我和家人经历了一次奇妙的旅行。

  二、谓语动词

  汉语:无动词或多动词

  英语:单动词

  e.g. 我妈妈很漂亮。 My mother is pretty.

  我们又唱又跳。 We sang and danced.

  我们邀请他们到上海来玩。We invited them to come to Shanghai for a visit.

  你上课常常缺席所以我想要提醒你。You are often absent from class so I want to remind you.

  三、主语

  活到老,学到老。One is never too old to learn.

  很难说谁对谁错。It’s hard to tell who is right and who is wrong.

  昨天找到了丢失的钢笔。The lost pen was found yesterday.

  上饭店吃饭很贵。It’s expensive to eat out.

  乘飞机旅行更舒适、便捷。Traveling by plane is faster and more convenient.

  四、定语汉:常常是前臵定语;英:前臵和后臵定语

  我们学校的所有学生all the students in our school

  左边数第五个男孩the fifth boy from the left

  英国人的日常生活everyday lives of the British

  在中国骑车的人数the number of cyclists in China

  几种气体的混合物a mixture of several gases

  三到六岁的孩子Children from 3 to 6 years of age

  隔壁的音像店the music store next door

  用英语写的信the letter(s) in English

  晚上最晚一班返回的公交车the last bus back in the evening

  城市生活的嘈杂、脏乱the noise and dirt of city life

  当一个音乐家的计划plans to be a musician

  出国学习的机会the chance to study abroad

  供人坐着休息的安静场所a quiet place for people to sit in/rest

  找到任何一个可以询问的人find anyone to ask

  Writing tips:

  1.时态一致

  必须注意所用时态符合上下文。如果用过去时叙述一个故事,就要保证通篇都用过去时,不要在作文中间变成现在时。同样,如果是在谈论普遍问题、现状或日常习惯,就要用现在时,而不要用过去时。

  e.g. Yesterday I did my homework. It takes me three hours.

  His father thought he is good at math.

  She started her new job last week. She liked it.

  We didn’t go to the party. We aren’t invited.

  2. 主语一致

  应该保持全文人称一致,这样读者才能跟随一个逻辑思维顺序。否则读者会感到困惑。

  e.g. Although you may fail the exam, he can still be useful to the country.

  It not only provides you with lots of knowledge but also develops his interests.

  3. 主谓一致/人称一致, 确保语法正确。

  e.g. Things I hate to do is doing homework.

  Every people start to learn English.

  Every person starts to learn English.

  The activities can relax ourselves.

  The activities can help us relax ourselves./We can relax ourselves by taking part in the activities.

  4. 词序/语序。它能够帮助准确表达作者本意并并避免意义含糊不清。注意要让句子尽量保持英语的表达习惯。 e.g. I already have had lunch.

  She with her mum traveled to Italy.

  I always be the winner of the piano contest.

  In China, he knew there were big floods.

  5. 并列句。用并列句能使文章更生动流畅,它包含两个独立分句和一个连词,如:and, but, or, so等。

  e.g It was crowded. We were able to see him.

  She is a top student. She is a talented musician.

  Though he doesn’t have much money, but his heart is full of love.

  文章的结构 --开头、主体和结尾

  中考英语书面表达篇幅要求不长,但是,要求有明确的开头部分,文章主体部分及结尾部分,不能是一篇由十几个句子简单拼凑起来的短文。因此,在写作过程中,要注意以下要点:

  1. “开门见山”式的开头:一般来说,文章的开头应尽量做到“开门见山”,即要用简单 明了的语言引出文章的话题,使人一开始就能了解文章要说明的内容。

  2. “条理清楚”的主体:理顺要点的先后表达顺序,并将各个单句按照其逻辑关系进行适当调整。

  3. “点明主题”的自然结尾:文章的结尾没有固定的模式,可以根据表达主题的.需要灵 活创造。一种较为常见的结尾方法,是对一篇文章的中心思想、主要内容进行清晰明朗的总结,甚至是画龙点睛。恰当的总结和归纳往往会使文章增色。

  十句作文法

  所谓十句作文并非一定是10句,很多考生的高分作文(80字以下)的句子数量都在8-10句之间(以句子长短和不同结构而变化)。其基本模式为:

  第一段(开头):  主题句(第一句)

  扩展句(第二句)

  第二段(正文)----扩展句(第3-7句)视内容而决定扩展句的多少

  第三段(结尾)----结尾句(第八句)

  第一段为开头,包括两句。第一句为主题句,提出问题并通过问题点明全文主体;第二句为扩展句,进一步说明和支持主题句。第二段为正文,共七句左右。第一句为主题句提出本段的主旨,其余为扩展句。句与句之间应用好过渡词。第三段为结尾,简化为一句,是对全文的总结,并说明自己的观点。

  Time order:

  First, …/First of all,… Next,…

  Second,… After that,…

  Third,… Then…

  Space order

  On the right,…On the left,…In the center,…In the middle,… Finally,…

  Next to the…,…Beside the…,…Opposite the ______,…

  Near the ______,…Under the ______,…Above the ______,…

  On one side of the ______,…On the other side of the ______,…

  Transition signals

  1、递进:besides, in addition, what’s more

  2、转折和对比:but, however, on the other hand,

  3、总结:in short, in brief, for these reasons

  4、因果和结论:as a result, due to, because of, thus, therefore

  5、强调:really, indeed, surely

  6、其它插入语:worse still/what’s worse, after all, if possible,

  Sayings and proverbs:谚语

  Pride goes before a fall 骄者必败 .

  A good beginning is half done.良好的开端是成功的一半。

  Confidence in yourself is the first step on the road to success.自信是走向成功的第一步。

  Custom makes all things easy.有个好习惯,事事皆不难。

  Great hopes make great man.伟大的抱负造就伟大的人物。

  Honesty is the best policy.做人诚信为本。

  Hope for the best, but prepare for the worst.抱最好的愿望,做最坏的打算。

  Nothing is difficult to the man who will try.世上无难事,只要肯登攀。

  If a thing is worth doing, it’s worth doing well. 值得做的是就值得做好。

  Where there is life, there is hope. 生活充满了希望。/留得青山在,不怕没柴烧

  A close mouth catches no flies.病从口入。

  An apple a day keeps the doctor away.一天一苹果,不用请医生。

  Early to bed and early to rise makes a man healthy, wealthy and wise.早睡早起身体好。

  A mother's love never changes. 母爱永恒。

  A friend is easier lost than found.得朋友难,失朋友易。

  A friend is never known till a man has need. 需要之时方知友。

  A good book is the best of friends, the same today and forever.一本好书,相伴一生。

  By reading we eich the mind, by conversation we polish it.读书使人充实,交谈使人精明。

  Choose an author as you choose a friend.择书如择友。

  All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy.只会用功不玩耍,聪明孩子也变傻。

  We know not what is good until we have lost it.好东西,失去了才明白。

  Variety is the spice of life.丰富多彩是生活的调味品。

  Life is just like a bowl of cherries.生活犹如一盘樱桃。

  Living without an aim is like sailing without a compass. 生活没有目标等于航行没有指南针。

  Pleasant hours fly past.快乐时光去如飞。

  万能模板

  一.书信类

  开头:How nice to hear from you again.

  Let me tell you something about the activity.

  I’m glad to have received your letter of Apr. 9th.

  I’m pleased to hear that you’re coming to China for a visit.

  I’m writing to thank you for your help during my stay in America.

  结尾: With best wishes.

  I’m looking forward to your reply.

  I’d appreciate it if you could reply earlier

  二、口头通知常见写作模板

  呼语及开场白部分:

  Ladies and gentlemen, May I have your attention, please?

  I have an announcement to make.

  正文部分:

  ll the teachers and students are required to attend it.

  Please take your notebooks and make notes.

  Please listen carefully and we’ll have a discussion in groups.

  Please come on time and don’t be late.

  结束语部分:

  Please come and join in it.

  Everybody is welcome to attend it.

  I hope you’ll have a nice time here.

  That’s all. Thank you.

  三、议论文模板  正反观点式议论文模板

  导入:第1段:Recently we’ve had a discussion about whether we should.。. (导入话题)

  Our opinions are divided on this topic.(观点有分歧)

  正文: 第2段:Most of the students are in favour of it.(正方观点)  Here are the reasons. First.。. Second.。. Finally.。.(列出2~3个赞成的理由)

  第3段:However, the others are strongly against it. (反方观点)

  Their reasons are as follows.

  In the first place..

  What’s more.

  In addition..(列出2~3个反对的理由)

  结论: 第4段:Personally speaking/In my opinion ,/ To my mind ,/ As far as I am concerned ,/ I am ofthe opinion that …, the advantages overweight the disadvantages, for it will do us moreharm than good, so I support it.(个人观点)

  4.“How to”类议论文模板:

  导入: 第1段:提出一种现象或某种困难作为议论的话题

  正文: 第2段:Many ways can help to solve this serious problem, but the following may be most  effective. First of all.。. Another way to solve the problem is 。.. Finally.。.(列出2~3个 解决此类问题的办法)

  结论: 第3段:These are not the best but the only two/ three measures we can take. But it should benoted that we should take action to.。.(强调解决此类问题的根本方法)

  中考英语作文各类话题优秀作文构写思路与评讲

  学校生活篇:

  1. 上学期间,学校的某些场所一定给你留下了美好的记忆,如教室、阅览室、操场等。某英文报纸正以”My favorite place at School”为题征文,请你投稿。描述一个你最喜欢的地方,并请说明原因。提示词语:Classroom, reading-room, playground, bright, quiet, large, help, improve.

  My favorite place at school

  My favorite place at school is the reading room. It is very big and bright. There are a lot of useful books, newspapers and magazines there.

  I like reading books and magazines there because they not only provide me with much knowledge, but also help me learn a lot about what is happening around the world. Sometimes I even feel I can have a talk with the people in the books.

  I can also relax myself in the peaceful environment there. When I feel tired and unhappy, the reading room is the best place to go to. Reading helps me forget all my troubles.

  For me, the reading room is the place I like best.

  2. 你觉得你的校园生活安全吗?请你写一篇题为”How to Keep safe in school”的短文,谈谈你的看法。

  内容包括:

  1.描述一件发生在你身上或你看到的发生在校园的意外事件(经过与结果)

  2.提出解决这种校园意外事件的建议(至少两条)

  3. 呼吁每个学生要注意校园安全。

  How to Keep safe in school

  Do you know our school life could be dangerous if we are not careful enough. For example,Last month,my friend Tom fight with a classmate. And Tom chase the classmate. By the time he run into the classmate , the classmate had already closed the door, so Tom hit the door, and then he send to the hospital soon, and he stay in hospital about two weeks.

  So, we should know the important of the safe in school. Here are my suggestions. We can't fight with others. And we should get on well with our classmates. What's more, we should be carefully in our school life.  Let's keep safe in school, and have a better life!

  3. 中招考试即将到来,许多学生感到压力很大,为此很烦恼。你校的校刊特意进行了课后放松方式的调查。请你以”Learn to relax yourself “为题写一篇80词左右的短文。要点提示:

  1)学生压力大及其表现

  2)学会放松很重要

  3)常见的放松方式

  4)最适合的自我放松方式

  5)我的建议

  Learn to relax yourself

  Now many students of Grade 9 are under too much pressure. They always feel too tired to listen to the teachers carefully in class.

  It’s important for students to relax. Only in this way can they study well and be healthy. Here are some different ways to relax themselves. For example, they can try to have enough sleep,or they can listen to their favorite music after class. They can also read some books or do some sports. For me, I often hang out with my friends.

  While you are studying, don’t forget to relax. You will study better after a good rest.

  4. Maggie 在英语学习中遇到一些困难,她写信向你求教并邀请你周末去她家。请你写回信应邀并向她介绍英语学习的方法(不少于两条),建议她用英语回信以提高英语表达能力。词数80左右。信的开头和结尾已给出,不计入总数。

  I’d love to visit you this weekend. I’m sorry that you have some trouble learning English. Let me give you some advice. Do you take notes in English classIt’s a good way to learn English grammar. And if you are poor in listening, you can watch English movies and listen to English songs. Why not write back in EnglishIt will help you to improve your writing. I hope you will make great progress in your study of English.

  5. 请以”My middled school life is______________”为题写一篇英语短文。

  要求:

  1.先把题目补充完整(空格处可以是单词、短语,也可以是从句);

  2.短文内容应包括三方面的信息:in the past, now 和in the future.

  3.短文中不得出现真实的地名或人名及能够透露出你个人身份的信息。

  4.词数80词左右。开头已给出,不计入总词数。

  My middle school life is unforgettable

  In the past, I was busy learning my subjects and worked hard at them, I got on well with my classmates, I was good at English and I liked playing basketball. Now I am interested in history because it is

  篇八:2014年中考英语写作常用模板(题型版)

  中考英语写作常用模板(题型版)

  中考英语作文万能模板:阐述主题题型

  要求从一句话或一个主题出发,按照提纲的要求进行论述.

  1. 阐述名言或主题所蕴涵的意义.

  2. 分析并举例使其更充实.

  中考英语作文万能模板:解决方法题型

  要求考生列举出解决问题的多种途径

  1. 问题现状

  2. 怎样解决(解决方案的优缺点)

  In recent days, we have to face I problem-----A, which is becoming more and more serious. First, ------------(说明A的现状).Second, ---------------(举例进一步说明现状)

  Confronted with A, we should take a series of effective measures to cope with the situation. For one thing, ---------------(解决方法一)。 For another -------------(解决方法二)。 Finally, --------------(解决方法三)。

  Personally, I believe that -------------(我的解决方法)。 Consequently, I’m confident that a bright future isawaiting us because --------------(带来的好处)。

  中考英语作文万能模板:说明利弊题型

  这种题型往往要求先说明一下现状,再对比事物本身的利弊,有时也会单从一个角度(利或弊)出发,最后往往要求考生表明自己的态度(或对事物前景提出预测)

  1. 说明事物现状

  2. 事物本身的优缺点(或一方面)

  3. 你对现状(或前景)的看法

  Nowadays many people prefer A because it has a significant role in our daily life. Generally, its advantages can be seen as follows. First ----------------(A的优点之一)。 Besides -------------------(A的优点之二)。

  But every coin has two sides. The negative aspects are also apparent. One of the important disadvantages is that ----------------(A的第一个缺点).To make matters worse,------------------(A的第二个缺点).

  Through the above analysis, I believe that the positive aspects overweigh the negative ones. Therefore, I would like to ---------------(我的看法).

  (From the comparison between these positive and negative effects of A, we should take it reasonably and do it according to the

  circumstances we are in. Only by this way, ---------------(对前景的预测).)

  中考英语作文万能模板:议论文的框架

  (1) 不同观点列举型( 选择型 )

  There is a widespread concern over the issue that __作文题目_____. But it is well known that the opinion concerning this hot topic varies from person to person. A majority of people think that _ 观点一________. In their views there are 2 factors contributing to this attitude as follows: in the first place, ___原因一_______.Furthermore, in the second place, ___原因二_____. So it goes without saying that ___观点一_____.

  People, however, differ in their  opinions on this matter. Some people hold the idea that ___观点二_______. In their point of view, on the one hand, ___原因一_______. On the other hand, ____原因二_____. Therefore, there is no doubt that ___观点二______.

  As far as I am concerned, I firmly support the view that __观点一或二______. It is not only because ________, but also because _________. The more _______, the more ________.

  (2)利弊型的议论文

  Nowadays, there is a widespread concern over (the issue that)___作文题目______. In fact, there are both advantages and disadvantages in __题目议题_____. Generally speaking, it is widely believed there are several positive aspects as follows. Firstly, ___优点一______. And secondly ___优点二_____.

  Just As a popular saying goes, “every coin has two sides”, __讨论议题______ is no exception, and in another word, it still has negative aspects. To begin with, ___缺点一______. In addition, ____缺点二______.

  To sum up, we should try to bring the advantages of __讨论议题____ into full play, and reduce the disadvantages to the minimum at the same time. In that case, we will definitely make a better use of the ____讨论议题___.

  as is shown/indicated/illustrated by the figure/percentage in the table(graph/picture/pie/chart), ___作文题目的议题_____ has been on rise/ decrease (goesup/increases/drops/decreases),significantly/dramatically/steadily rising/decreasing from______ in _______ to ______ in _____. From the sharp/marked decline/ rise in the chart, it goes without saying that ________.

  There are at least two good reasons accounting for ______. On the one hand, ________. On the other hand, _______ is due to the fact that ________. In addition, ________ is responsible for _______. Maybe there are some other reasons to show ________. But it is generally believed that the above mentioned reasons  are commonly convincing.

  As far as I am concerned, I hold the point of view that _______. I am sure my opinion is both sound and

  well-grounded.

  中考英语作文万能模板:现象说明文

  (新中国成立以来发生了翻天覆地的变化,)

  Recently _______,what amazes us most is______________,it is ture that__________.

  There are many reasons explaining__________________________.The main reason is____________________.

  what is more_________________________.thirdly__________________________.As a result_______________.

  Considering all there,________________________.For one thing_____________________,for another________

  ____.In Conclusion____________________.

  中考英语作文万能模板:一种事物或现象(负面意义倾向)

  关于A的话题,早已引起了广泛的社会关注。如今在电视、报纸、日常生活的很多角落,都有越来越多的关于A的议论。

  给A一个精确恒定的定义并非易事,因为它的概念涉及了科学、人性、思想、经济、社会、自然等广阔的领域。一般而言,我们可以这样描述A

  A能成为公众关注的焦点,主要是由于它对个人、集体乃至整个世界都有着不容忽视的不良影响。

  认真分析后我们可以看到,A对社会/世界 /健康的不利有很多。首先,从最直观的角度来看,A的出现直接损害了(这里加入一句针对性的话,如人类的身体健康和环境的平衡)。(举例)。其次,从更深一层次上讲,它为人类的精神文明蒙上了一层阴影。更可怕的是,由于A所产生微小利益,却促成了许多可悲的人们为其忘乎所以,破坏了人类生存

  的法则和空间。

  事实上,A的出现是社会发展和人类进步的产物,A所带来的危害是人类进化过程中付出的代价。同时,A的产生来源于部分人们的自私和趋利性,他们看到的是肤浅和片面的利益,而从未从整个全局和人类整体的利益出发去认识和分析它。这使得A始终挥之不去。对此,我奉劝他们,跳出狭小的角落,用长远和全局的眼光去重新审视A。

  而如今,我们已深受其害,要想消除它的危害,我们必须从根源上杜绝它的产生,我们每一个人都应给予A高度的重视,用系统的和科学的方法去解决,唯有这样,避免它带来更多损失,我们人类前进的脚步才会更加平稳,更加欢快的迈向辉煌的明天。

  中考英语作文万能模板:说明原因型

  模块(3)

  Currently,XX has been the order of the day .This does demonstrate

  the theory --- nothing is more valuable than XX 。

  It is clear that (1)。 If you (  2  ), as a result ,

  your dreams willcome true 。 On the contrary, if you (  3  )。

  Failure will be following with you .It turns out that all your plan falls through 。

  No one can deny another fact that (4  ) .You donn‘t have to

  look very far to find out the truth , in respect that we all know (  5) 。

  It will exert a profound influence upon (6)。

  With reference to my standpoint ,I think (7  )。

  附加

  一、英语书信的常见写作模板

  开头部分:

  How nice to hear from you again.

  Let me tell you something about the activity.

  I’m glad to have received your letter of Apr. 9th.

  I’m pleased to hear that you’re coming to China for a visit.

  I’m writing to thank you for your help during my stay in America.

  结尾部分:

  With best wishes.

  I’m looking forward to your reply.

  I’d appreciate it if you could reply earlier.

  二、口头通知常见写作模板

  呼语及开场白部分:

  Ladies and gentlemen, May I have your attention, please? I have an announcement to make.

  正文部分:

  All the teachers and students are required to attend it.

  Please take your notebooks and make notes.

  Please listen carefully and we’ll have a discussion in groups.

  Please come on time and don’t be late.

  结束语部分:

  Please come and join in it.

  Everybody is welcome to attend it.

  I hope you’ll have a nice time here.

  That’s all. Thank you.

  三、议论文模板

  1.正反观点式议论文模板

  导入:

  第1段:Recently we’ve had a discussion about whether we should.。. (导入话题)

  Our opinions are divided on this topic.(观点有分歧)

  正文:

  第2段:Most of the students are in favour of it.(正方观点)

  Here are the reasons. First.。. Second.。. Finally.。.(列出2~3个赞成的理由)

  第3段:However, the others are strongly against it. (反方观点)

  Their reasons are as follows. In the first place.。. What’s more.。. In addition.。.(列出2~3个反对的理由)

  结论:

  第4段:Personally speaking, the advantages overweigh the disadvantages, for it will do us more harm than good, so I support it.(个人观点)

  2.“A或者B”类议论文模板:

  导入:

  第1段:Some people hold the opinion that A is superior to B in many ways. Others, however, argue that B is much better. Personally, I would prefer A because I think A has more advantages.

  正文:

  第2段:There are many reasons why I prefer A. The main reason is that 。.. Another reason is that.。.(赞同A的原因)

  第3段: Of course, B also has advantages to some extent.。. (列出1~2个B的优势)

  结论:

  第4段: But if all these factors are considered, A is much better than B. From what has been discussed above, we may finally draw the conclusion that 。..(得出结论) オ

  3.观点论述类议论文模板:

  导入:

  第1段:提出一种现象或某个决定作为议论的话题

  As a student, I am strongly in favour of the decision. (亮明自己的观点是赞成还是反对)

  The reasons for this may be listed as follows. (过渡句,承上启下)

  正文:

  第2段:First of all.。. Secondly.。. Besides.。.(列出2~3个赞成或反对的理由)

  结论:

  第3段:In conclusion, I believe that.。. (照应第1段,构成“总—分—总”结构)

  4.“How to”类议论文模板:

  导入:

  第1段:提出一种现象或某种困难作为议论的话题

  正文:

  第2段:Many ways can help to solve this serious problem, but the following may be most effective. First of all.。. Another way to solve the problem is 。.. Finally.。.(列出2~3个解决此类问题的办法)

  结论:

  第3段:These are not the best but the only two/ three measures we can take. But it should be noted that we should take action to.。.(强调解决此类问题的根本方法)

  四、图表作文写作模板

  The chart gives us an overall picture of the 图表主题。 The first thing we notice is that 图表最大特点 。 This means that as (进一步说明)。

  We can see from the statistics given that 图表细节一 。 After 动词-ing 细节一中的第一个变化, the动词-ed+幅度+时间(紧跟着的变化) 。 The figures also tell us that图表细节二 。 In the column, we can see that accounts for (进一步描述)。

  Judging from these figures, we can draw the conclusion that (结论)。 The reason for this, as far as I am concerned is that (给出原因)。 / It is high time that we (发出倡议)。

  篇九:(上海中考)初三英语作文范文点评

  世外初三英语范文点评

  优秀习作1  上海市世界外国语中学  吴思怡

  作文题目

  “Sow a habit, reap a destiny.” What do you think of habitsWhat can our habits bring us Write a passage of at least 60 words on the topic “Habits”.  优秀习作

  Good habits are foundations on our way to success, while bad ones get in the way and hold us back. To begin with, good habits help us work more efficiently. If we get into the habit of tidying up our rooms, we will find it easy to obtain the things we need. Moreover, good habits leave others positive impressions. Showing our warm smiles is a habit which enables us to get along with our classmates and teachers well. On the other hand, bad habits can be destructive. Lots of people develop lung cancer just because of their habits of smoking. As you can see, habits really make a difference in our lives.

  作文评析

  本文开门见山陈述观点,说理清晰。能运用举例对比等手法使本文观点更具说服力,如通过整理房间、微笑和吸烟三个习惯的后果正反两方举例,体现出小作者思维的宽度和缜密度。

  从语言驾驭能力看,本文句式丰富,语言流畅,既善于活用考纲词组如 “get into the habit of”,又有如“leave others positive impressions”等地道的表达,既有较复杂的主从复合句,又有短小有力的简单句,错落有致,一气呵成。

  朱萍

  作文题目

  Your class would like to make time boxes for people in 2040. You start collecting things today and put them in the boxes. The people in 2040 will be able to compare their life with life now. You also need to write a letter to the people in 2040 introducing one thing in the box. 【Oxford 9B Unit 2 Writing】

  优秀习作

  To the people of 2040,

  In the box you can find an energy-saving lightbulb. They all come from 2014. By holding the little bulb in your hand, you can sense its smooth, transparent glass-made shell, which is of oval shape. Inside the shell, some metal-made wires tangle with each other in a regular order. This is used to enable electricity to pass through the whole bulb to provide energy. Attach the bulb to a base and then turn on the switch, you’ll find the little bulb lighting up the dark room. Another characteristic of it is that it saves more energy than other kinds of bulbs. So this lightbulb is “green”.

  We hope this will give you some information about life in 2014.

  Yours faithfully, Angel

  作文评析

  此篇作文题来自牛津9B第二单元课后Writing练习,它的内容是向未来2040年的人们写一封信,介绍一件我们这个时代所用的物品。作文题材是学生平时不常操练的说明文。

  本文作者选取了节能灯泡作为对象。在描述过程中,她首先对灯泡的外形进行了细致的描写,从光滑、椭圆型的玻璃外壳,到内部互相缠绕在一起的金属丝。继而写到当电流通过,灯泡会照亮房屋的功能。最后还不忘介绍此种灯泡的特殊之处在于比起其它灯泡,它“节能环保”的特点。

  全文脉络清晰,描写细腻、形象、生动,句式丰富,语言流畅,衔接自然,结构紧凑。充分体现了作者的语言表达能力,是一篇很好的说明文范例。

  包琪瑞

  作文题目

  Write a passage of at least 60 words on the topic “The thing that made me angry”.

  ( 以“让我生气的事”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文,标点符号不占格。) Use the following points as a guide:

  What made you angry

  Describe the thing that made you angry in detail.

  How did you deal with the situation

  (注意:短文中不得出现考生的姓名、班级及其他相关信息,否则不予评分。) 优秀习作

  There are few things in life more annoying than being laughed at. When I failed to solve the question on the blackboard and just stood in front of it without saying a word, I could hear those annoying whispers. This really made a perfectionist like me get angry. But I couldn’t let the anger get me out of control. Instead, I chose to ignore those ironic words and focus on the question. In addition, I decided to work harder after school to get myself improved. Due to all the changes I made, I believe I can avoid being laughed at in the future.

  作文评析

  全文结构清晰,层次分明,衔接流畅。本文从内容来看观点新颖、构思巧妙,以”being laughed at”被动语态的结构体现作者内心的不情愿,紧扣题目中的angry。作者侧重对于第二个问题的回答,以生动、细腻的文笔描写了站在黑板前的心理活动,让人读来有生临其境之感。而在结尾,作者不忘传播一丝正能量,驱赶了这个作文题可能带来的负面情绪。本文的内涵和语言都反映出作者的语言驾驭能力,以开头”There are few things … more … than …”来看,作者有丰富的语言积淀和极强的语言运用能力,因而全篇行文流畅,句式丰富,用词精准。本文值得初三学生学习借鉴。

  李婧

  作文题目

  Write a passage of at least 60 words on the topic “I like reading ________ (detective stories, newspaper, magazines, comic strips, etc.) best.”

  Use the following points as a guide:

  What do you like reading best

  Why do you like reading them best

  How do they influence your life

  (注意:短文中不得出现考生的姓名、班级及其他相关信息,否则不予评分。) 优秀习作

  Magazines, as one form of ways to wisdom, are my favorite. Magazines combine the advantages of all forms of books. They have the diversity of information and at the same time, hold deep thoughts. There is rarely a thing that you can’t find in magazines. Reading magazines has provided me with the opportunity to broaden my horizon, gain knowledge and meanwhile, relax. Since they are more portable than others, you can roll them up and take them with you. In brief, reading magazines has brought laughter and knowledge to my life. I like reading magazines best.

  作文评析

  该篇文章开宗明义,点名文章意图。从内容上看,从杂志包罗万象,开拓读者视野;到杂志放松读者心情;再谈到杂志携带方便可以随时取阅等优点,清晰详实地表达出了作者的观点。文章结尾再次点题,全文简短却简练,切题又精炼。从语言而言,作者具有较强的语言功底,能够熟练运用多样的句式和词组,如meanwhile, since, in brief, provide with等,使文章更富有变化和可读性。语句之间衔接通畅,用词准确自然。词汇量丰富,如wisdom, diversity, opportunity, laughter等。如果文章能在三点优点前用明显的词汇加以区分,如first, furthermore, what’s more等,能使其更加一目了然。

  贲方

  作文题目

  Someone says, “Sow an action, reap a habit; Sow a habit, reap a destiny.” What’s your opinion on thisPlease write an article of 60-80 words on the topic “Habits”.

  有人说:“播种行为,收获习惯;播种习惯,收获命运。”对这种说法你怎么看?请以“习惯”为题写一篇60-80字的作文,谈谈你的观点。

  优秀习作

  Habits

  No one can deny that habits play an important role in our life. Everyone should have good habits and break their bad habits as well. In my opinion, habits can change your living style or standard. For instance, if you are an efficient person, you certainly won’t stay up late. This is a good habit that leads to a healthy life. Obviously, little habits undoubtedly change our life and even our destiny.

  作文评析

  本文语言简练流畅,表达自然。句型句式较多样灵活。

  本文开门见山地给出观点: 习惯在我们日常生活中占据着非常重要的位置。我们应该养成好习惯改掉坏习惯。之后给出习惯何以重要的理由,并且以举例子的形式来辅助强调好习惯养成的重要性。最后一句总结首尾呼应,再次点题,全文虽短,却流畅通顺,一气呵成。

  何怡文

  篇十:凯文英语中心,凯文老师,2014年上海中考英语作文分析,及,范文

  2014年上海中考英语作文分析,及,范文

  整体趋势

  今年的英语 作文this time next year,让考生谈一谈明年生活有什么变化,以及畅想对自己对他人的期望,并会做些什么。今年的考题一改之前的写建议、写方法、写感受,转向去引导学生畅想未来的记叙文,体裁上还是有些出乎意料的。但从内容来看,却又很在情理之中,中考完的学生马上要面临的就是高中的崭新生活,充满着挑战和变化。这样的命题更贴近学生当下,也能充分激发学生从多角度思考、多层次发挥。

  细致分析

  1. 单从题目着手,马上能确定应用的时态,以将来时,将来进行时为主。

  2. 其次通过中文的一些说明可以确定文章的组织架构。

  三段式中的首段可以先用一些形容词对明年的生活变化有一个概述。

  其次body part 可根据题意详细分为以下层次:第一,从现在的生活着手重点谈几方面的变化,如生活上会接触很多新的朋友,新的老师;学习上会有更大的挑战,从被动学到自主学的学习方法的一些转变等。第二,在这样的变化下,对自己和他人的期望。第三,自己有一些什么样的打算,朝什么方向努力,具体的行动。

  最后,点题并表达对未来生活的期许和愿景。

  3. 想要拿到高分,语言的使用也是一个得分点。学生可以通过巧用过渡词,多变的句式以及名人名言来征服阅卷老师。

  2014年上海中考英语范文

  This Time Next Year

  It's exciting to imagine what the happy life will be like.

  At this time next year, I will be a senior high student, and I will make a lot of new friends. I hope to be more

  independent so that perhaps I will be taking part in a summer camp abroad to improve my spoken English. Also I will help my parents do housework in order to know how to take care of myself when I am alone.

  Life will be totally different, but I'm really looking forward to it.

  2014年上海中考英语范文

  This Time Next Year

  Life is changeable, and that's why everyone longs for the future, which is full of challenge as well as hope.

  Perhaps I will have achieved my goal this time next year, studying in a senior high school. Despite that, diligence will be still needed to make myself go further in English. Basically, it is important to concentrate in class and take notes carefully. Then, I will benefit from reading English books. What is more, going abroad is of great use in improving my oral English. Only in this way can I progress in English endlessly.

  Make plans and go for what I want. And I believe when the challenge is coming, the hope is also around the corner.

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